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Gone Forever

The sweet, dark, glittering blood,
Flowing through delicate channels
under porcelain skin so pale,
Resting now for silent sleep.
White lace curtains fluttering in
the cool evening breeze, soft and new.
Ivory moonlight sparkling clean
on carpets, softening footsteps.

Hot breath, scorching sensitive skin.
Long canines flashing malice,
Striking quick and ruthlessly, soon
pain, pleasure, pain, so confusing.
Life’s elixir pumping hard,
Soon sweet copper gone forever.
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this is a sonnet i had to write for english in tenth grade. it has not been changed in that time, and though i really don't like poetry, i really like the way this came out.

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:iconaribasultan:
The layout is that of an Italian sonnet, interesting :)

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~Jan-leva.

"The bitterest tears shed over graves are for words left unsaid and deeds left undone."

"You could build a city from experience alone, If the walls crumble through warfare what future will experience hold?"
:iconphoenix2890:
yeah, it was interesting writing it. i had an entire night to write it, and i wrote the whole thing in about twenty minutes. it was basically one of those ';pull it out of your rear' moments.

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arrogance has been the fall of many a good soul. don't let yourself be one of the fallen. ~ me
:iconaribasultan:
haha oh I get those a lot =p

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~Jan-leva.

"The bitterest tears shed over graves are for words left unsaid and deeds left undone."

"You could build a city from experience alone, If the walls crumble through warfare what future will experience hold?"
:iconphoenix2890:
it's amazing what you can do when you get them, isn't it? some of my best works come from those moments.

--
arrogance has been the fall of many a good soul. don't let yourself be one of the fallen. ~ me
:iconaribasultan:
Don't I know it :D

--
~Jan-leva.

"The bitterest tears shed over graves are for words left unsaid and deeds left undone."

"You could build a city from experience alone, If the walls crumble through warfare what future will experience hold?"
:iconphoenix2890:
lol

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arrogance has been the fall of many a good soul. don't let yourself be one of the fallen. ~ me
:icondwine:
well-written very intense
:iconphoenix2890:
thank you.

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arrogance has been the fall of many a good soul. don't let yourself be one of the fallen. ~ me

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